earlier this week, i had the pleasure of being introduced to an amazing writer by the name of barry graham through an interview he did with scot over on be not inhospitable… scot posted a piece written by barry called bomb factory which just happens to be a one sentence piece of fiction…. i was so taken by the depth that he was able to reach with just that one sentence,, that i could not help but give it a try myself… and wow,, did i have a blast doing this…
when we were young by ~weeja on deviantART
jesse hung a right, and left off the gas, purposefully slowing as he wound down the faded brown ribbon a what was left a ole ginny combs road, as it laced its way towards the house where he was sure that he and his would live out their days in the shadow of that fine oak tree, where local spun yarn would have it, that ginny herself had spent many a warm summers day, dreaming on an old tire swing, knotted to a low branch, long before life become a ligature, and she found herself a dangling, at the end of her own rope….
November 21st, 2008 at 5:12 am
good one–a whole story in one sentence–yes
November 21st, 2008 at 7:19 am
You are just such a talent. This sentence is of the calibre of two of the great sentence writers of all time : Graham Greene and Alice Munro. Brilliant.
November 21st, 2008 at 7:56 am
Ooooooooh how chilling
November 21st, 2008 at 8:11 am
Perfectly done! Must try it myself some time.
November 21st, 2008 at 8:50 am
This is a one-sentence prose poem! Excellent!
November 21st, 2008 at 2:48 pm
Amazing how this sentence is very like the stretched rope you describe! Fantastic piece of dramatic intrigue!
November 21st, 2008 at 3:59 pm
You’re just too good to describe in words. . . . . but I’ll try, creative, excellent, talented, moving, provocative. . . . anywho. . . .
Very good as usual - that can’t be an easy thing to do!
PLL, CordieB.
November 22nd, 2008 at 1:19 am
Nicely done Jodi! You’ve captured your Paisley magic in one sentence!
November 22nd, 2008 at 5:56 am
paisley,
Well executed. And a nice change of pace.
rel
November 22nd, 2008 at 9:19 am
Stopping by to say I am grateful for the sweet words you left on my blog a few weeks back
Thank you 
You made me day.
November 22nd, 2008 at 9:47 am
You’re forte is definitely writing in the film noir dective genre, Jodi.
There are deep shadows within you that you articulate into fresh
and powerful trysts of {human} being, to say finding the deep
place within others. Not sure this little post of mine is quite articulated
as I hope, but hoping you get my point.
November 22nd, 2008 at 11:28 am
very very good - you are a very talented person, and your experiment was so interesting - i’ll try and give it a whirl one day when i’m doodling around — you power packed so much info with the visuals, i was sorry when it came to the end - just wanted to keep reading more and more!!!
November 22nd, 2008 at 3:08 pm
This is very cleverly done! This indeed a story in one sentence. I’ll have to try it sometime.
November 22nd, 2008 at 5:32 pm
Amused to death - in every dream house, a heartache…your sentence/story is like a corridor, with so many doors - leading to who knows what?
November 22nd, 2008 at 8:28 pm
Incredible. Indeed, you are talented. I hope to see more of these…
November 22nd, 2008 at 8:32 pm
You are so clever Paisley.You could make a whole novel from this pared down peice.
November 22nd, 2008 at 9:10 pm
I liked your story for its use of slang, clear narrator, and sad ending. I’ve never thought that much of flash fiction, but your writing here makes me want to try it! What’s unique here is that neat regional voice and a layer of mystery. Well done! And thank YOU for visiting my blog.
November 22nd, 2008 at 9:25 pm
this was excellent, paisley….just excellent….
November 23rd, 2008 at 1:41 am
*Shudder*. You wouldn’t find that on a realtor’s sheet. I like it, very creepy……and the word ligature, eeek. You packed a huge amount into one sentence and it is very successful.
November 23rd, 2008 at 6:43 am
All I can say is, WOW! I must try this one day.
November 23rd, 2008 at 9:40 am
lovely as usual Paisley..would love to try the style sometime
November 23rd, 2008 at 10:54 am
we used to have tire swing… and of course i recall it in sepia.
November 23rd, 2008 at 11:56 am
16. Amazing how many pictures and emotions you painted in so few words. Nice!
November 23rd, 2008 at 12:24 pm
Very powerful.
November 23rd, 2008 at 2:04 pm
hat was a damn good try. Magnificent piece of writing. Yes a whole story is locked in there
November 23rd, 2008 at 2:04 pm
This is a wonderful piece. It would have had just as much impact if it were chopped up into pieces, but to do it in one sentence is amazing. I might just have a go!
November 23rd, 2008 at 2:29 pm
Hi … Unrelated topic but you have been awarded … well … an award, over at my place. Hugs and love, T
November 23rd, 2008 at 4:13 pm
Brilliant as ever! You really know how to push the boundaries…
November 23rd, 2008 at 5:08 pm
Excellent job Jodi! You always challenge yourself and succeed.
November 23rd, 2008 at 5:39 pm
That was so well done!
November 23rd, 2008 at 10:33 pm
Wow! That was impressive. Well written.
November 23rd, 2008 at 11:08 pm
Hey Paisley, how come everybody knows your secret J name? Your avatar picture is so pretty. I like this new one very much. So now you can leave me messages all of the time. Make some lemonade. We ate a brownie, the Betty Crocker microwave kind. Wasn’t too bad. But I think it made me a little silly. You can tell whenever I’ve been visiting Daisy The Curly Cat. She has this funny effect on me. Be happy. Oh sssshhhhh you might be sleeping. TIme for bed it’s 1AM. Nighty-night.
November 24th, 2008 at 5:27 am
I love me a good, long sentence, their words carefully arranged to convey the perfect set of observations, sometimes as a fly on the wall might, witnessing everything. Nice. Very nice… Oh, and good morning!
November 24th, 2008 at 6:14 am
You always amaze me, your creativity is endless…I am always on the edge of my seat, drawn in to every yarn you spin…good work girl!
November 24th, 2008 at 8:36 am
That doesn’t look very easy. I’ve read this concise piece and now I’m going to check out Scot’s. But I don’t think I’m ready to venture this way yet.
November 24th, 2008 at 11:15 am
Really beautiful posting!!! Nice picture and pretty colores!!! Have a nice day!!!
November 24th, 2008 at 4:39 pm
well written!
November 24th, 2008 at 11:01 pm
wow, powerful. packs quite a punch. I like it! hmmm. something to try. I know it’s not obvious, but I do love those long sentences.
ps thanks for visiting my blog!
November 29th, 2008 at 3:18 pm
All these little challenges and goals we set for ourselves are really great for honing our writing. I’m glad you had a good time with this one. I’ll give it a try, sooner or later.
December 5th, 2008 at 12:27 pm
Your one-sentence story has the same nostalgic feel as An Occurrence on Owl Creek Bridge, the short B & W film based on a short story by Ambrose Bierce. I remember accidentally wathing that film when I was like six years old and it’s impact has never left me. Maybe thats why I love story so much